Over the last couple of weeks we been writing a range of stories in which we have to think carefully about our word choices and the phrases we use to create a picture in the reader's mind.
Here are just a few of these in response to an image of a ride at the show!
Once I stepped onto the death ride I knew I had just taken the biggest risk ever in my life. I heard the loudest scream come out of my mouth, since about 6 years ago. Then it happened, the bar dropped over my head all of a sudden and it started to spin like a fidget spinner, it was probably going 93 km per hour. It felt exhilarating.
Riley
I heard myself screaming with absolute terror ,I was really frightened and anxious. I could hear the whir of the ride moving round and round. The sound of the people below sounded like the hum of an old propeller plane.
I saw the colours of the ride flash past my eyes at a terrific speed. The people below were like miniature spinning toys that looked like they were tiny enough to pick up.
I felt the rubbery fell of the handle as it got warmer as my hands wrapped round it. I felt the cold wind as it dashed past me at a tremendous speed.
I wondered would this horrid ride ever come to an end? When the ride eventually finished. I wondered whether I would ride the horrid ride again and decided definitely not.
Emmeline
As I stepped closer and closer to this outrageous spinning ride I thought to myself this is going to be fun. When I finally got on my seat I Immediately forgot what I was doing. I have too many emotions that I can’t explain as the supervisor push the red neon button. As it progressively gains speed I start to feel dizzy and nauseous. I thought I was going to throw up. I heard everyone screaming, squealing and yelling as they wondered what made them get on this ride.
Deacon
I felt the world churning like butter in a barrel. I felt like throwing up. I heard screaming and yelling. My shoulders ached as I putt all my weight on them.I was dizzy sick.I felt like the world was going to spin out of this universe. Blood rushed through my veins and the people beside me were petrified. I knew the ride was about to end but I still thought to myself would this ride ever end? As I looked around all I saw was a blur. I just managed to make out people at a hotdog stand. I could feel the wind brushing past my face.
Lachlan
I heard the wind violently blowing in my ear, people screaming their lungs off and the ride screeching while we were going round and round. I saw a massive crowd throughout the whole show. I can see the massive ferris wheel looking like it’s going to collapse and people as pale as vampires. I felt dizzy in my head and I felt like the whole ride was going to fall and shred to pieces. The wind was blowing in my face like a hurricane. I was wondering if I was going to vomit because I had a snow cone before I hopped on. I wondered "will this ride ever end?"
Lewis
I heard screams of enjoyment, sickness, fright and I also heard some people pass out, I also heard the birds tweeting in fright as the huge ride nearly hit the poor bird!
I saw someone chunder and then barf all over the people below us, it was so disgusting because the wind had blown it everywhere! But I think the people who got the barf on them were raging with anger!
I felt as if I was about to puke, but my stomach refused to ruin this ride for me. I felt a wave of excitement as the big ride stopped and then out of nowhere…. IT DROPPED, I was spiralling downwards at an outrageous rate then it stopped and came back up. I felt nauseous!
I wondered when this ride would be finally over as it was giving me an outrageous headache, I wondered how many times people have puked on this very ride. I bet there would be so many!
Sophie
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